Poem

[Robin]

No offense but don't you guys have anything else to do except writing poems

make a poem or don't post here. Simple as that.

I don't have a poem, yet I am posting here.

I just wanted to say that these poems really contain some very good once, I'll see if I can make a list or something for the Newspaper when this hits 20 pages.

[Zoroark]

No offense but don't you guys have anything else to do except writing poems

make a poem or don't post here. Simple as that.

I don't have a poem, yet I am posting here.

I just wanted to say that these poems really contain some very good once, I'll see if I can make a list or something for the Newspaper when this hits 20 pages.

That's fine but when someone has nothing positive to say why say it?

The only reason someone should post criticism is if it's about someone's poem, something they could work on, and so on or an occasional opinion relating to a poem.

TL:DR
Basically I'm saying I don't want many useless posts here, your post is informal so it's fine.

[Indognito]

I'm captain of the hood dog, yea thats who you see
I'm captain of the hood dog, tell me who you be!
Don't play out in my street, I got that K out in my street
380 tucked in them jays on my feet.
My kicks sharp like I'm wearing a pair a cleats.
I got your girl eyeing me, yea she spying me
creeping and following me
I'm a G
I keep two guns together like they Siamese.
So pls.. dog
don't try me or I cut your life short like Chinese.
We got sooo many guns aint no way to hide these!
Running over bodies, pitch fork on the Maserati
Pullin up, Kawasaki, Knocking niggas out like Rocky
Got the thotties with da body, On wood with no Holly
Sippin Sake, I told lil mama I'm good without the molly
I'm hood without the shotty, We like to party Lodi Dodi!!
I pull up n a new Bugatti, already got the hotties
While your boo looking sloppy, Man I swear I'm too cocky.
Don't leave your girl around me, I'm a true player for real.

Caption of the hood? More like caption of yo mama, the only girl you dateing is a 15 year old lama. I'm faster on my feet after I had some java while you're drowning in lava that my rhymes produce, reduce the level of stupidity that you recruit, by mowing the grass and unleashing my brown recluse, don't even get up unless if failure is what you choose. The gun in my pocket has a bullet for you. you got nothing else to say due to your ass being chewed. So now it's time to pay my dues, only I don't pay in paper I pay in led the first clip goes strait into the back of your head and ill make sure your baby mama is fed with a little thing called death. you thought you could win but you couldn't compete, how do you like your grave with the blood stained sheet? Hope it's nice and cozy but I couldn't give a fuck about niggas who keep testin there luck but your dead now with only one buck shot. The blood that was spilled was more then a lot. You couldn't even fight a jock you got chinked until your jaw was locked, screaming wasn't an option grenades I be lobbin right through window of your log cabin and your wife I be stabbin, leave no whiteness behind while I take a sip of wine and go out to a fancy resteraunt on your dime, but you can't enjoy it because you're not alive.

[Juice.]

Caption of the hood?

That guys right, I'm the "caption" of the hood, I'm the product of it
My money counter broke cuz I'm stackin so good, and its a lot of it.
I ain't gota lie to spit, Trap boom steady, dog I moved a lot a bricks.
You don't wana talk girls, I got a lot a chicks but its time to get rich.
You never drove luxury whips, My flow coke like the kind you sniff.
I don't know about your rhymes but mine are piff, u better get a grip.
I already got a grip, In my fist and its held with a money clip.
Acrobatic guap, watch how my money flip, obese is how my money fit.
So its nothing prick, One smile and I'm leaving with your honey dip.
Off to a sunny trip, laughing about some funny shh, she pourin up cris
Laughing about how you're nothing slick, cuz you can't stunt like this!
I hope you get mad cuz I keep the gun for this, Clearly I'm running this.
I got a gun so big its the same one they go bear hunting with.

[Indognito]

Caption of the hood?

That guys right, I'm the "caption" of the hood, I'm the product of it
My money counter broke cuz I'm stackin so good, and its a lot of it.
I ain't gota lie to spit, Trap boom steady, dog I moved a lot a bricks.
You don't wana talk girls, I got a lot a chicks but its time to get rich.
You never drove luxury whips, My flow coke like the kind you sniff.
I don't know about your rhymes but mine are piff, u better get a grip.
I already got a grip, In my fist and its held with a money clip.
Acrobatic guap, watch how my money flip, obese is how my money fit.
So its nothing prick, One smile and I'm leaving with your honey dip.
Off to a sunny trip, laughing about some funny shh, she pourin up cris
Laughing about how you're nothing slick, cuz you can't stunt like this!
I hope you get mad cuz I keep the gun for this, Clearly I'm running this.
I got a gun so big its the same one they go bear hunting with.

Lol bro you funny as hell, no wonder in competition you always fail, I come from a place where it's dead or in jail if you boast the stuff you post, before you get started you just got roasted cause fake ass niggas get noticed and while they make noise they get postponed, never heard from again cause you just can't win, you were caught posing and then found your body in a storage bin, you think you got heart but that ain't even true the women you were caught with was secretly a dude before you started you were garenteed to lose. but then again I'm going against someone with no shoes. Now your only numbness to pain is drinking Booz. You're pathetic so someone called the medic only it was too late because the event of your life ended.

[Juice.]

Lol bro you funny as hell, no wonder in competition you always fail, I come from a place where it's dead or in jail if you boast the stuff you post, before you get started you just got roasted cause fake ass niggas get noticed and while they make noise they get postponed, never heard from again cause you just can't win, you were caught posing and then found your body in a storage bin, you think you got heart but that ain't even true the women you were caught with was secretly a dude before you started you were garenteed to lose. but then again I'm going against someone with no shoes. Now your only numbness to pain is drinking Booz. You're pathetic so someone called the medic only it was too late because the event of your life ended.

You act hard but boy you soft, I can get you knocked off n I don't care what it cost. I never took a loss dog cause I'm a true boss, Too hot to cool off with the V8 when I cruise off, We'll shoot your whole house up and tear the roof off, we at the funeral just to see how many you loss, man this dude off, I said she pourin cris in my foreign whip, Never said it touch my lips, u always get it mixed, So for anybody I know you with, I got a gun with the longest clip, It's like a 38 second youtube ad that you can't skip! and no you not as raw as this, This is just a target hit, n ima get your captain and your sergeant hit, Dig a hole and place you in the farthest ditch, killing me rly sounds like some retarded-ness. My pen too sharp for this, to a target ima dart, If its a party I'm a part! If we in the water ima shark, For entering my quarters you get stopped. My niggas at the border with the stock, We'll kidnap your dads daughter off the block, Call your cell like "25k or somebodies getting SHOT!" I'm not playing, we'll even make the call from the DOCK! I'll put her on the phone and she'll say "bro tell them not to call the cops!!"

[Indognito]

Lol bro you funny as hell, no wonder in competition you always fail, I come from a place where it's dead or in jail if you boast the stuff you post, before you get started you just got roasted cause fake ass niggas get noticed and while they make noise they get postponed, never heard from again cause you just can't win, you were caught posing and then found your body in a storage bin, you think you got heart but that ain't even true the women you were caught with was secretly a dude before you started you were garenteed to lose. but then again I'm going against someone with no shoes. Now your only numbness to pain is drinking Booz. You're pathetic so someone called the medic only it was too late because the event of your life ended.

You act hard but boy you soft, I can get you knocked off n I don't care what it cost. I never took a loss dog cause I'm a true boss, Too hot to cool off with the V8 when I cruise off, We'll shoot your whole house up and tear the roof off, we at the funeral just to see how many you loss, man this dude off, I said she pourin cris in my foreign whip, Never said it touch my lips, u always get it mixed, So for anybody I know you with, I got a gun with the longest clip, It's like a 38 second youtube ad that you can't skip! and no you not as raw as this, This is just a target hit, n ima get your captain and your sergeant hit, Dig a hole and place you in the farthest ditch, killing me rly sounds like some retarded-ness. My pen too sharp for this, to a target ima dart, If its a party I'm a part! If we in the water ima shark, For entering my quarters you get stopped. My niggas at the border with the stock, We'll kidnap your dads daughter off the block, Call your cell like "25k or somebodies getting SHOT!" I'm not playing, we'll even make the call from the DOCK! I'll put her on the phone and she'll say "bro tell them not to call the cops!!"

I thought they told you not to fuck with real Gs that also included me, I was known as mental, down in south central, niggas like you got 5 shots through the temple, you couldn't defeat me and even if you try you'll be the only laying down and die, I'm not gonna lie this shit was fun, watching little niggas like you on the run, you proved your scared and ran back to your lair but the traps have been set and your life has been snared, this was easy, you should be ashamed, at the stuff you do because they're lame. Tame, is something I'm not, you should've known that the first time you got shot. Dragged your body to the river and then delivered the lead to your liver threw you in just before uncapping my gin take a sip for my victory/win you couldn't compare to a person like me because I don't play nice I play dirty, it's called survival you should look it up but you ain't looking up shit your life halted like a rut that had rust but police can't bust, a person with no proof, your home was destroyed I caved in the roof, and now the truth is concealed my term was appealed in my favor and I'm out on the streets makin deals.

[Draco]

I thought they told you not to fuck with real Gs that also included me, I was known as mental, down in south central, niggas like you got 5 shots through the temple, you couldn't defeat me and even if you try you'll be the only laying down and die, I'm not gonna lie this shit was fun, watching little niggas like you on the run, you proved your scared and ran back to your lair but the traps have been set and your life has been snared, this was easy, you should be ashamed, at the stuff you do because they're lame. Tame, is something I'm not, you should've known that the first time you got shot. Dragged your body to the river and then delivered the lead to your liver threw you in just before uncapping my gin take a sip for my victory/win you couldn't compare to a person like me because I don't play nice I play dirty, it's called survival you should look it up but you ain't looking up shit your life halted like a rut that had rust but police can't bust, a person with no proof, your home was destroyed I caved in the roof, and now the truth is concealed my term was appealed in my favor and I'm out on the streets makin deals.

You? a G? Why dont you go and suck a D

omg dont fuk wit me i noob plz

[Indognito]

I thought they told you not to fuck with real Gs that also included me, I was known as mental, down in south central, niggas like you got 5 shots through the temple, you couldn't defeat me and even if you try you'll be the only laying down and die, I'm not gonna lie this shit was fun, watching little niggas like you on the run, you proved your scared and ran back to your lair but the traps have been set and your life has been snared, this was easy, you should be ashamed, at the stuff you do because they're lame. Tame, is something I'm not, you should've known that the first time you got shot. Dragged your body to the river and then delivered the lead to your liver threw you in just before uncapping my gin take a sip for my victory/win you couldn't compare to a person like me because I don't play nice I play dirty, it's called survival you should look it up but you ain't looking up shit your life halted like a rut that had rust but police can't bust, a person with no proof, your home was destroyed I caved in the roof, and now the truth is concealed my term was appealed in my favor and I'm out on the streets makin deals.

You? a G? Why dont you go and suck a D

omg dont fuk wit me i noob plz

Lol I was expecting a little more then that. XD also alright since you asked nicely ill spare you.

[Naruk]

Can u guys put something like poem format? Each line per sentence something like that, that way its easier to develop a tune our of ur rap... or is it jus me doin it